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Lady Salvation by ~rider-on-the-storm:iconrider-on-the-storm:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Mature Romance > Open


discovering you
concealed from feeling
in the secret garden
feels like
       I’m trapped in the sweet scent
of your summer breeze

lulled in the promise
of a smile, I let go
& expose grace
again

pleasant blur beauty
with a hallow kiss being
the constant share
on the fading horizon
we gather another
& another
riding off
into our infinity
©2005-2009 ~rider-on-the-storm
:iconrider-on-the-storm:

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...descriptions suck

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:iconchelsea-belle-06:
~chelsea-belle-06 Sep 9, 2005, 8:49:48 PM
i told you you'd think of an ending eventually!
you've been writing about pleasent/peaceful things lately.. i like! (of course i like your other stuff too.. but ya know)
hmm. is this fave-worthy?
:iconphr3ak000000000:
~phr3ak000000000 Sep 9, 2005, 9:06:59 PM
"pleasant blur beauty" gorgeous line, i love that mister. wonderful write. you always have a way to sweep the reader away. :clap:

--
I sacrifice every breath I breathe, to make you believe
~Aquemini
Save the alien
:iconrobidoux:
=robidoux Sep 10, 2005, 7:40:06 AM
*sigh*
Wow - I sure needed that today. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful writing. The second stanza is my favorite - every letter - promises, smiles, letting go.

:glomp:
:icondeliriously-dying:
~deliriously-dying Sep 11, 2005, 12:23:36 AM
mmm.

reading your poetry while drunk is a beautiful thing indeed. :love:

--
under the water,
you left me drowning.
:iconyearningtofly:
~yearningtofly Sep 11, 2005, 8:14:35 PM
so, um, here's my comment...happy now??

just kidding!! :heart:

i like it...it is a different than your other poems. you really are a sweet heart...on the inside. much love

--
Poppies bleed petals of sheer excess. You and I, this sweet battleground.
:icontheeliterate:
~TheeLiterate Sep 13, 2005, 11:14:51 AM
i love the continuity of theme in the first stanza ("discovering", "concealed", "secret", "trapped")
you're so clever ^_~
:iconpoetryinmywounds:
~PoetryInMyWounds Oct 1, 2005, 7:24:24 PM
this poem makes me want to lay back and close my eyes and not care about anything for a little while

--
"I've made peace with the falling leaves. I see their same fate in my own body." Bright Eyes
:iconmalrose:
~malrose Nov 6, 2005, 9:04:20 AM
this is so lovely...and powerful. it just wraps you up, and you want to curl into it and sleep...

k, well i do anyway.

;p
~Ri

--
"Together we will rape the English language."
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