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Hubris by ~rider-on-the-storm:iconrider-on-the-storm:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


Theses new iridescent lights
Shimmer and ripple a colorful
Hundred hues
Green’s and blues
Neptune’s masterpiece
Cool, appealing like the ideal
talk of a drunk drowning slowly
to the end of a bottle.

My young feathers are withering
& the wax is heavy
I’m falling deep into the twilight.
©2006-2009 ~rider-on-the-storm
:iconrider-on-the-storm:

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meh.

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*WomanOfThePage Mar 27, 2006, 3:54:57 AM
Welcome back! This is very good - was wondering where all that creativity had gone - just in a Senior slummber :)
Love this line "...Neptune’s masterpiece
Cool, appealing like the ideal
talk of a drunk drowning slowly
to the end of a bottle."

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:dev Emotional-writings:
:icontuishimi:
=Tuishimi Mar 27, 2006, 6:06:41 AM
It's pretty! You know how I am always saying "shorter is always better?" In this case I think (considering the topic and how you are comparing it) you could have gone a little more epic on it. :)

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...be quick to listen, slow to speak, slow to anger...
:iconbiggdl76:
~BiggDL76 Mar 27, 2006, 6:56:50 AM
wow man... i love it, really cool

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So what...I'm fat...I'm gay too...You got a problem with it?
:iconlifereallysux:
~lifereallysux Mar 27, 2006, 3:36:23 PM
nice man, i dig it

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"You can close your eyes to things
you don't want to see,
but you cant close your heart
to things you don't want to feel."
:iconyearningtofly:
~yearningtofly Mar 27, 2006, 7:05:07 PM
i get the picture of a candle...fire, like the pride of the gods possibly?
hmm...i like it

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Poppies bleed petals of sheer excess. You and I, this sweet battleground.
:iconrider-on-the-storm:
~rider-on-the-storm Mar 27, 2006, 7:49:05 PM
i geuss thats close..

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"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
:iconrider-on-the-storm:
~rider-on-the-storm Mar 27, 2006, 7:49:24 PM
thanks brotha

--
"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
:iconrider-on-the-storm:
~rider-on-the-storm Mar 27, 2006, 7:49:40 PM
hey thanks man!
and for the fav as well :D

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"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
:iconrider-on-the-storm:
~rider-on-the-storm Mar 27, 2006, 7:50:47 PM
you dont even know how much i considered that thought RIGHT after i submited it.
i want to. i might. And thanks for the comment :)

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"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
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