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Eternity belongs another beauty -
in still frame
            on a cloud lulling
she builds castles out of air in the deep, dismal night.
Detached she becomes;
a bitter pill can be hard to swallow
grabbing a cigarette
             he lays on the couch, consigned to oblivion.

Forlorn thoughts flood his mind.

Without warning
his heart abruptly confesses
                            to sincerity;
a flash of clairvoyance and he explodes
identifying the surface
            of what truly matters.

He imagines her
displaying a grace so beautifully abundant
            in his narrow light of bliss,
he begins to cry
conceiving her words,
                           raining clarity.

           The goddess, miracle
                        illuminated muse.
          A value deferred, invisible hue

Returning to her tower
where she resides
              underneath royal purple dreams,
declaring his wrongs,
a scatter of laughter
& they grasp the truth
             succeeding their eyes.

The Venus influence
has brought the sun
              into his somber eyes.
Rain, now absent,
              in this radiant realm.
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Full title
"Awaking from the absence of a dream" or "Galore"

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:iconwomanofthepage:
Wow! This is really and truly amazing and I don't know what to say that wouldn't sound like rambling! You must keep writing...
:iconrider-on-the-storm:
you know, i wish you did ramble.
be completely honest :)
and thank you
absolutely, for your words,
the favorite and for reading!

--
"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
:iconsorrowburn:
The way this flows, the alliteration, the imagery and the sheer magnitude of the portrayal of feeling is astounding!
One of your best to date!

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Wit + Sarcasm X Misanthropy2 - Amiability + Charm =SorrowBurn

"And when it all came crashin' down, I became withdrawn and the only thing I knew how to do is to keep on keepin' on."
R.Z.
:iconrobidoux:
Without warning
his heart abruptly confesses
to sincerity;

I'm drawn to this stanza. It warms me inside - floods memories of my 'breathless' poem and the night I wrote it.

I need to digest a little more - it almost seems like two writings - the first ending at "raining clarity".
:iconrider-on-the-storm:
:blush:
thank you
for the favorite and the positive feedback!
its good to hear from you.

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"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
:iconrider-on-the-storm:
Raining Clarity
was actaully the first thing i came up with for this poem.
and the rest was kinda built around them words.

thats possibly why it feels like two poems in one. i definitely wanted to make this one decently long too because of the truth behind the poem, this occured when i was out in Pennsylvania with my love :):heart:

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"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
:iconsorrowburn:
Always happy to comment on good stuff, with good feedback.
Had it open all night, been reading it again and again.
It's nice, to see hope.

--
Wit + Sarcasm X Misanthropy2 - Amiability + Charm =SorrowBurn

"And when it all came crashin' down, I became withdrawn and the only thing I knew how to do is to keep on keepin' on."
R.Z.
:iconrobidoux:
well
it is fab
you are so very talented w the word
im so proud of you
:icontuishimi:
Nothing like reconciliation (with a dosage of self-realization). :D

--
...be quick to listen, slow to speak, slow to anger...

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