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Delicate Rhapsodies by ~rider-on-the-storm:iconrider-on-the-storm:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open


together we tongue
& lather through whispers
& difficult answers
in spotless dreams
being carried away
by delicious rapture

glowing ornament full of glee
tasting thoughts with cloudy flavor
& chasing the crazy children of dawn
watch as they flow thru my hair
hushed their movement, unannounced
unaware

in the pleasing morning tide
my muse hums delicate rhapsodies
   quietly in my ear

rest now, my beloved
fall upon ebony clouds
& ride the spiral down
                                   down
                                              down
©2005-2009 ~rider-on-the-storm
:iconrider-on-the-storm:

Author's Comments

being intoxicated rules..got the first half of it during my escape.
LEEEEECH

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:iconrider-on-the-storm:
~rider-on-the-storm Aug 16, 2005, 2:35:45 PM
Yes, i was aiming for something a little more softer then my journal entry poem..
im glad you caught that. thanks again bud

--
"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
:iconrider-on-the-storm:
~rider-on-the-storm Aug 16, 2005, 2:37:03 PM
haha thank joo?!

--
"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
:iconrider-on-the-storm:
~rider-on-the-storm Aug 16, 2005, 2:37:31 PM
haha thank you cass. and thank you for the fav!

--
"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
:iconrider-on-the-storm:
~rider-on-the-storm Aug 16, 2005, 2:38:16 PM
why thank you so much for the positive comment :)

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"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
:icondisguised-in-shy:
~disguised-in-shy Aug 16, 2005, 7:24:54 PM
uhmm yeah its really soft. but really really really strange. thats it. good job.. i think:D

--
If everyone chooses their own truth, then every truth is different. if they are all different, than there really is no truth, but without truth our lives have no meaning
Search for THE truth..not the thing that you want to be true
:iconrider-on-the-storm:
~rider-on-the-storm Aug 16, 2005, 8:51:31 PM
uhh thanks? hahah

--
"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
:iconrabid-squirrel:
~rabid-squirrel Aug 17, 2005, 1:17:54 AM
very awesome poem. my only gripe is the second stanza seems forced...like it's too wordy :shrug: great job again man

--
bobby dylan.
:iconrider-on-the-storm:
~rider-on-the-storm Aug 17, 2005, 5:02:20 AM
yeah i hear what your saying. maybe my next one wont feel so forced. I hope
thanks man :)

--
"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
:icongroovycamel:
~groovycamel Aug 17, 2005, 12:32:41 PM
joo are welcome = )

--
Man is an animal.
But he is an animal which embodies God.
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