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Delicate Rhapsodies by ~rider-on-the-storm:iconrider-on-the-storm:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open


together we tongue
& lather through whispers
& difficult answers
in spotless dreams
being carried away
by delicious rapture

glowing ornament full of glee
tasting thoughts with cloudy flavor
& chasing the crazy children of dawn
watch as they flow thru my hair
hushed their movement, unannounced
unaware

in the pleasing morning tide
my muse hums delicate rhapsodies
   quietly in my ear

rest now, my beloved
fall upon ebony clouds
& ride the spiral down
                                   down
                                              down
©2005-2009 ~rider-on-the-storm
:iconrider-on-the-storm:

Author's Comments

being intoxicated rules..got the first half of it during my escape.
LEEEEECH

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~phr3ak000000000 Aug 15, 2005, 9:34:18 PM
:wow: that was amazing. honestly :faint:

rest now, my beloved
fall upon ebony clouds
& ride the spiral down
down
down"

man, i sure miss your work this is beautiful.

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:nod::heart:
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~chelsea-belle-06 Aug 15, 2005, 9:35:08 PM
wow jd. youve done it again. another awesome poem.
this one tho.. i love it cuz when i read it i got all.. i dont know.. it made me feel peaceful.. i cant think of the word.. but yeah. you get the idea. i like it a lot :D

FAV!!
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~avauntphotos Aug 15, 2005, 10:08:32 PM
i cannot wait to have poetry with u jd!
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~bigjilmboognish Aug 16, 2005, 1:44:47 AM
Hey man, damn good poem... very flowing and peaceful.

--
“NAKED Lunch -- a frozen moment when everyone sees what is on the end of every fork.”
~William S. Burroughs
«Boognishes. We build smiles.»
:iconrobidoux:
=robidoux Aug 16, 2005, 6:12:17 AM
Gorgeous
Erotic and dreamy all at one....i want to read over and over again.

I love your first stanza - every letter of it. I wouldn't change a word.
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~darkwolfj13 Aug 16, 2005, 6:29:04 AM
Mmmm all mellow and relaxed ... I'm thinking you were aiming for something soft, sweet, and peacefull in this poam?? And thats what I felt. *going to drift lazily through the house*

--
I have nothing to say, and yet I'm still talking....
:jedi: and you can't stop me..... :evillaugh:
:icongroovycamel:
~groovycamel Aug 16, 2005, 7:57:33 AM
Niiiccee Im listening to Gloria and I though of jooooo even though I dont even know jooooo

--
Man is an animal.
But he is an animal which embodies God.
:iconyearningtofly:
~yearningtofly Aug 16, 2005, 10:49:45 AM
beautiful

i'm going to fav it...just because i helped inspire it!! :|

it really is great though!!

--
Poppies bleed petals of sheer excess. You and I, this sweet battleground.
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*WomanOfThePage Aug 16, 2005, 2:26:49 PM
Very, very nice...really like the abstract way of expressing feelings and sentiment -

"...in the pleasing morning tide
my muse hum’s delicate rhapsodies
quietly in my ear

rest now, my beloved
fall upon ebony clouds
& ride the spiral down
down
down.."

Beautiful!
:iconrider-on-the-storm:
~rider-on-the-storm Aug 16, 2005, 2:34:47 PM
thank you!! i love reading your comments.

--
"in america as the media hushes
millions of eyes float to the marble
of time where a stroke causes a collapse"
- splinter (wallpaper)
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